CJ

[Ms. Kianna]

Okay, so I am reserving judgement on the new Broke Straight Boys until it had more scenes under it's belt, I don't usually get into solos, and I'm determined to not compare the new director with David.

But..............

I was watching the CJ scene. The park search was working, CJ was attractive, I believed he could be a starving straight artist, the director got him back to the futon.

Then.............

He had CJ hold the money in his hand, use his hands to spread his ass cheeks apart, turn and look at the camera, and say, "I'll do anything for money."

That was the hokiest, cheesiest thing ever. I felt so sorry for CJ, and sad that it had to be his first scene, when the new director took Broke Straight Boys across the line to cheesiness. Mark, please don't let the director do that again, because THAT was degrading to a model. That was different than talking about money, or throwing the money around.

 

[mikeyank]

Okay, so I am reserving judgement on the new Broke Straight Boys until it had more scenes under it's belt, I don't usually get into solos, and I'm determined to not compare the new director with David.

But..............

I was watching the CJ scene. The park search was working, CJ was attractive, I believed he could be a starving straight artist, the director got him back to the futon.

Then.............

He had CJ hold the money in his hand, use his hands to spread his ass cheeks apart, turn and look at the camera, and say, "I'll do anything for money."

That was the hokiest, cheesiest thing ever. I felt so sorry for CJ, and sad that it had to be his first scene, when the new director took Broke Straight Boys across the line to cheesiness. Mark, please don't let the director do that again, because THAT was degrading to a model. That was different than talking about money, or throwing the money around.

I haven't watched this scene yet, Ms. K, however, the overuse of the visual of cash in all of the new scenes, is my only real problem with the new scenes, so far. However as we've only seen four new vignettes, so far, I have to assume that these were all shot before, any criticism on the forum came out, and hopefully, "Matthew" will cool it with flashing the cash.

 

[lubetube]

Ms. K I completely agree.

I too am not a fan of solos, but this one was working nicely until the "I'll do anything for money" part. It's either so contrived or that director is on some power trip.

I think the director should stand in front of the camera and repeat, "I'll do anything for money."

 

[mikeyank]

More British dialect in the scene descriptions

As Slimvintage has pointed out, the new writer of the blurbs appears to be a British chap. I found three more terms in the new description that might indicate this:

I was out and about in the park, looking for some hot straighties who wanted to earn some extra dosh

CJ also showed me some of the watercolour art he had for sale in his portfolio

Massaging his balls, CJ stroked himself in a stead pace even as he kept moaning 'oh yeah!' to himself as he got closer to cumming

It is really of minor consequence if the author of these descriptions, is American or not, but I'm curious as to why Mark would have selected a Brit to represent "Matthew" in the blurbs. Oh, and I understand that the contest is over, so there is no need to send me a T shirt Slim.

 

[lubetube]

Mike, are you saying the blurbs have gone from shakey to Shakespeare?

 

[tjgoldstein73]

I believe the person writing the stories is Australian. Dosh is a term regularly used as slang for money.

As for the term, 'watercolour art'.. I don't see the problem with it or why it's been highlighted as its very obvious the art CJ showed was done in watercolour paint... unless you are referring to the spelling of watercolour?

 

[tampa24]

As Slimvintage has pointed out, the new writer of the blurbs appears to be a British chap. I found three more terms in the new description that might indicate this:

I was out and about in the park, looking for some hot straighties who wanted to earn some extra dosh

CJ also showed me some of the watercolour art he had for sale in his portfolio

Massaging his balls, CJ stroked himself in a stead pace even as he kept moaning 'oh yeah!' to himself as he got closer to cumming

It is really of minor consequence if the author of these descriptions, is American or not, but I'm curious as to why Mark would have selected a Brit to represent "Matthew" in the blurbs. Oh, and I understand that the contest is over, so there is no need to send me a T shirt Slim.

I think it's really cool that we have a British subject or even an Aussie writing the narratives. And we learn some of the Queen's English along the way! lol Having someone other than the director write the narratives in the director's place (or should I say, "in his stead" lol) is a staple of the older Broke Straight Boys So for those who want to keep some things the same, this is an odd quirk that will stay.

I have to chuckle because I remember when people were complaining to David in the forum about all the spelling errors and typos in the (much older) narratives. David was getting so annoyed. It's rather cute in hindsight. haha He was saying things like, "I've told you before. I don't even write those things. Someone else does. I have nothing to do with it. I don't know why you're blaming me."

I wrote him a PM and told him the reason that newbies to the site especially were addresing their complaints to him was because the narratives were all written in the first person. "I"and "me". All from David's perspective.

"I" had John stand. Then "I" told him to take off his shirt and pants, but to leave on the underwear. He told "me" that he wasn't going to bottom.
Etc, etc...

So it's natural for new people or non forumites to assume that the narratives are all written by the director himself. But they aren't.

It may not be as good as a t-shirt Mikey. But I'll be happy to send you a hug.

 

[tampa24]

As for the term, 'watercolour art'.. I don't see the problem with it or why it's been highlighted as its very obvious the art CJ showed was done in watercolour paint... unless you are referring to the spelling of watercolour?

That's exactly right TJ. It's the addition of the 'u' to many words that tips you off that you are reading an author who is British, Irish, Australian, Canadian, a Kiwi or a citizen of some other Commenwealth country.

 

[slimvintage]

Mr. Yank, do I have your address?

One thing we should all remind ourselves of, what with all this sherlocking of the texts, is that they are at least improved over what they used to be despite their britishness. I guess I find it puzzling that Mark would contract someone who doesn't write like Matthew sounds on tape to represent him in the first person singular in the texts. The old texts, with all the quirky syntax, hilarious spellings and grammatical errors so typical of David, came closer to reflecting the voice behind the cam than these do. But hey.

Yankers you get a shirtie. Send me ya addy mister.

 

[RSand88]

This one is impossible to watch. The image and sound keeps going off and then on again, It's not my computer since I can watch other shoots incl. College Boy Physicals and BFT without a problem.

 

[slimvintage]

That's exactly right TJ. It's the addition of the 'u' to many words that tips you off that you are reading an author who is British, Irish, Australian, Canadian, a Kiwi or a citizen of some other Commonwealth country.

http://www.answers.com/topic/list-of-british-words-not-widely-used-in-the-united-states

I'm gonna have to lay in teeshirts by the gross

 

[nsreed]

Hey. This is SUPPOSED to be about CJ RIGHT! Cute guy, has possibilities, was not all the way hard but I enjoyed seeing him over a couple of the new guys so far. And he seems like a great guy. Hope he does more. I am still on the fence about the new Broke Straight Boys Will give them another month and see what they do but so far, I give it a C-. The mouth breathing- body art- Jersey Shore type guys do nothing for me!

 

[rrhill]

CJ looks great and is very likeable.

And I noticed CJ laughed when he repeated the words: "I'll do anything for money."

Another solo worth watching.

PS: Does this guy sells his artwork on-line? I'll buy his watercolour paintings. The studio can use some of his paintings on the wall too.

 

[MissDeidra]

I just want to say, not wild at all about that scene and I really like the scene writer and think they do a helluva job. Big thumbs up Australia.

And I know for a fact their isn't a new writer, same one that has been writing them for months and months.

 

[erikthbod]

You gotta be kidding me. Are we suppose to belive any of these scenarios... I mean really I sort feel insulted. Just get to it... have the guys on the futon, get naked and do it. Enough of the dumb storylines. Your not gonna win an oscar for any of this anyway. Nobody buys them and they are just a big waste of time.
I did like CJ in a strange sorta way...

 

[Smiley]

Broke Straight Boys is a story site. It's in the name, fer criminy! "Broke Straight Boys" is a story outline in and of itself. If you don't like that story, go to the bonus site, "Straight Boys Jerk Off". That name is its story, too.

I have great sympathy for the story writer. I wrote ad copy for 30 years for a retail store. Have you ever tried to come up with a hundred different ways to say "sale"? Plus give me a break - what makes President's Day a good day to buy a matress? Absofuckinglutely nothing. If you tell a story - it's a good day to buy a matress because we made a special purchase from Serta and have the lowest prices around - then you can get people to act.

This gives me an idea for a thread.

 

[rrhill]

Hi Erik,

If you don't like the scenario's, why not fast-forward with one click to the action?

The scenario is a form, but the body language is true.

 

[silvercamel]

Okay, so I am reserving judgement on the new Broke Straight Boys until it had more scenes under it's belt, I don't usually get into solos, and I'm determined to not compare the new director with David.

But..............

I was watching the CJ scene. The park search was working, CJ was attractive, I believed he could be a starving straight artist, the director got him back to the futon.

Then.............

He had CJ hold the money in his hand, use his hands to spread his ass cheeks apart, turn and look at the camera, and say, "I'll do anything for money."

That was the hokiest, cheesiest thing ever. I felt so sorry for CJ, and sad that it had to be his first scene, when the new director took Broke Straight Boys across the line to cheesiness. Mark, please don't let the director do that again, because THAT was degrading to a model. That was different than talking about money, or throwing the money around.

We've gone from south florida to south hollywood....this cash-on-your-ass typifies that....but even the guys seem straight out of a California mold...but I'll wait and see....it's very early

 

[lubetube]

I think part of the problem of believability is that we were so used to no scenarios. Davad had a guy on the futon and expleaed that he had already spoken to him off camera about Broke Straight Boys The model told us that he was broke in various versions of that. He was behind on his bills or his needed fixing etc... etc...

So far with Broke Straight Boys 2.0 we are confronted with scenarios where we are to believe that a model was conincidentally found on a beach or at a park etc.. etc..

This requires acting on the part of the models and even the director/interviewer.

When you do that, you no longer have spontaneous scenes and the straight boy believability goes out the window. And most fans of this site are looking for exactly the opposite of porn stars acting a part. We want the boys to look and act like amateurs. Besides, most members are aware that the models answer ads, and are interveiwed and sign scads of papers before their ass ever appears on camera.

So, maybe the answer is to stick to the KISS principle. Keep It Simple, Silly. lol

 

[Ms. Kianna]

I think part of the problem of believability is that we were so used to no scenarios. Davad had a guy on the futon and expleaed that he had already spoken to him off camera about Broke Straight Boys The model told us that he was broke in various versions of that. He was behind on his bills or his needed fixing etc... etc...

So far with Broke Straight Boys 2.0 we are confronted with scenarios where we are to believe that a model was conincidentally found on a beach or at a park etc.. etc..

This requires acting on the part of the models and even the director/interviewer.

When you do that, you no longer have spontaneous scenes and the straight boy believability goes out the window. And most fans of this site are looking for exactly the opposite of porn stars acting a part. We want the boys to look and act like amateurs. Besides, most members are aware that the models answer ads, and are interveiwed and sign scads of papers before their ass ever appears on camera.

So, maybe the answer is to stick to the KISS principle. Keep It Simple, Silly. lol

I agree with a lot of what you said Lubetube.

Qscott has been announcing for the last week, that those of us that want to see hot sex, should go to one of the sights designed for gay sex. But, those sights are just a bunch of porn actors, doing a scene.

What we loved about the sex or oral on Broke Straight Boys is that it was "real." It just happened, whether it worked or not was a surprise. If we get to much acting going on, that element will be lost.

I am not the only one here that loves the Jimmie/Diesal series. The fact that Diesal and David were just as surprised at how that turned out as we were, is what made it so awesome.

David told the guys what he wanted them to try, and let them go. Stepping in to get it going, if apprehension was slowing things down. Getting too scripted or too cheesy, will ruin the "reality" of this site.